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托福写作开头写得好不好很关键
2018-03-29 09:59    出国资讯    小波

  想必经常考托福的考生们都知道,在托福写作中作文的开头和结尾都非常重要,是考官评判作文好坏的关键所在,如果你的作文开头写得乱七八糟,你肯定是拿不到高分的。在托福写作开头写作中考生们经常会犯一些错误,那么我们该如何改正这些错误,让考官老师眼前一亮呢?下面给大家详细讲解下托福写作开头方法的相关内容,希望对大家有帮助。

  一、托福写作开头方法之托福写作错误的开头方法:

  托福写作错误的开头方法一: 观点武断 态度强硬 (喷血指数:☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic1-The importance of confidence

  In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed。

  Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

  I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

  托福写作错误的开头方法二:中式英文人见人晕(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

  In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

  Topic 2- The population problem

  The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。

  Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world­

  I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

  Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

  Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”。

  托福写作错误的开头方法三:观点模糊态度暧昧(喷血指数:☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married­

  I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

  托福写作错误的开头方法四:偏离主题无轨电车(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement­

  I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。

  托福写作错误的开头方法五:语法错误惨不忍睹(喷血指数:☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished­

  About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should。

  托福写作错误的开头方法六:过分简单没有重点(喷血指数:☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic-The importance of environmental protection

  This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

  托福写作错误的开头方法七:用词不当 表达不准 (喷血指数:☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married­

  I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family。

  托福写作错误的开头方法八:意思重复原地踏步(喷血指数:☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

  My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society。

  托福写作错误的开头方法九:中国俗语胡乱翻译(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例:Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family­

  I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

  正确说法:Happiness lies in having many children

  Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance­

  We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……

  Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family­

  Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……

  Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

  I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”。

  托福写作错误的开头方法十:废话连篇不知所云(喷血指数:☆☆☆)

  典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married­

  This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

  修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题

  In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

  Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information­

  Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life。

  Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

  Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it­ Of course! It’s really very very important!

  二、托福写作开头方法之托福写作开头段最好这样写:

  一般来说,开篇段落的写作可分为两大步骤:

  第一步就是用简洁明了的句子对原题目的意思进行同义替换;

  第二步是提出自己的观点。

  这两大步骤细化起来可以概括为四句话:

  第一句,采用同义替换的方式对原题目的意思进行更改,当然是“形变神不变”;

  第二句,对题目的意思进行解释

  第三句,提出自己的观点;

  第四句,概括自己所提出观点的理由,引起下文。

  下面我具体用一些客户常犯的毛病题目来解释这个“两大步,四个句子”的具体运用方法。

  案例1:误解原意思

  Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things, they can do few things well­

  Original:

  Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period. Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement. Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.

  解析:

  文章第一句话不是对原题目意思进行解释,而是采用采取了和原意思相反的做法来进行题目诠释;第二句表明自己对误解题目的观点;第三句话对自己的观点进行近一步的解释;第四句一个过渡性的句子。开篇内容安排倒是很好,但是作者犯了误解原题目意思的错误导致后面整个文字都做了无用功。

  改后:

  When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously, they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly. Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time. Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors .Therefore , I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done . The reasons are as follow.

  Revised:

  第一句话对原题目意思进行了很好的诠释;第二、三句话进一步解释原题目;第四句话提出自己的观点;第五句话过渡性句子引起下文。

  案例2 :语言罗嗦,绕弯子给出自己观点,浪费时间

  Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better­ Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

  original:

  With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child. So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.

  解析:

  这个开头看似没有任何问题,但是仔细分析就会发现很多问题。首先,作者绕了个大弯才给出自己的观点。其次,观点是对原题目的抄写,改动的比较少。最后,开篇缺少引起下文的过渡句。更大的错误是这个开头更像是一个全文主要观点的一个分论点。

  Revised:

  As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family. Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However, considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically, I think to live independently the earlier, the better. Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.

  解析:

  第一句话诠释原题目意思;第二句话进一步解释第一句话;第三句话提出自己的观点;第四句话解释自己的观点,引出下文。

  通过这几个例子我们不难看出,托福作文开头其实并不难写。只要掌握规律就好!

 

  以上就是给大家整理的关于托福写作开头方法的相关知识介绍,给大家汇总了考生在托福写作开头段写作中常犯的错误,希望大家能有则改进,无则加勉,这样就能避免影响自己的整体作文水平,从而拿到高分成绩。

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